Another Remake

Bryan K · 9 Jan 2013, 14:45

Park Pavilion. Another one of my very first from a few years ago.

Not as drastic a change as my garage apt. Just a few enhancements.

Before (1st) and after (2nd).

Bryan K · 9 Jan 2013, 20:16

One last view.

Daniel · 10 Jan 2013, 13:53

Looks like an interesting design. i think it would help if you toned down the hue on the roosf - it looks cartoonish compared ot the rest of the image, and is distracting.

Bryan K · 10 Jan 2013, 18:22

@daniel said:

Looks like an interesting design. i think it would help if you toned down the hue on the roosf - it looks cartoonish compared ot the rest of the image, and is distracting.

Ah ha! Excellent suggestion. I was wondering what was bugging me about the roof, but couldn't quite figure it out.

Will try it and post the change.

Bryan K · 10 Jan 2013, 18:34

Is this better? Or should I tone it down some more?

Daniel · 10 Jan 2013, 21:09

I think it still looks a bit too bright. How about something like a dark olive drab, something with gray or brown in it.
Also, you could use a better grass texture. I've seen some people use a grass texture with "lawnmower stripes" in it - that would look good.
Then, throw in some people and VOILA!

chedda · 11 Jan 2013, 05:37

I agree the grass is half your image, it needs to be better.

Bryan K · 11 Jan 2013, 13:39

@daniel said:

I think it still looks a bit too bright. How about something like a dark olive drab, something with gray or brown in it.
Also, you could use a better grass texture. I've seen some people use a grass texture with "lawnmower stripes" in it - that would look good.
Then, throw in some people and VOILA!

Great suggestions.

However, I like the green shingles. I've seen this used on many roofs.

I'd love to make the grass better. I have the fur plug-in, but it's too much for my PC and stops the program almost dead for the scale of lawn.

Better people would be great as well, but I don't know where to get good ones for free. I'll check the 3D Warehouse again.

Thanks again for the very good suggestions.

davidh · 11 Jan 2013, 18:29

I would say,purely from a compostional viewpoint,the first view is better.it has more dynamic angles such as created by the paths, which guide us toward the entance.

Also, If you are going to have a large area of landscape at the front,such as your last image, then break it up - dont have blank areas at the front of the building.

Bryan K · 11 Jan 2013, 19:01

@davidh said:

I would say,purely from a compostional viewpoint,the first view is better.it has more dynamic angles such as created by the paths, which guide us toward the entance.

Also, If you are going to have a large area of landscape at the front,such as your last image, then break it up - dont have blank areas at the front of the building.

Excellent. I'll try those.

Bryan K · 11 Jan 2013, 21:06

Another view with just a few people and more trees.

novena · 12 Jan 2013, 22:47

hi Bryan!
I must agree that the grass is not helping your image, if the make-fur plugin is not working probably you could try to make it in photoshop (use a grass shaped brush and paint it in a new layer) here comes a link for a tutorial:
http://www.peachpit.com/articles/article.aspx?p=30882
may I ask what software are you using to render??
best
V

Bryan K · 13 Jan 2013, 15:39

@novena said:

hi Bryan!
I must agree that the grass is not helping your image, if the make-fur plugin is not working probably you could try to make it in photoshop (use a grass shaped brush and paint it in a new layer) here comes a link for a tutorial:
http://www.peachpit.com/articles/article.aspx?p=30882
may I ask what software are you using to render??
best
V

Thanks. I'll take a look at the tutorial.

Render? What render? That's just straight SU output.

novena · 13 Jan 2013, 20:46

straight SU output???? wow I feel myself like this & like this ,
best
V