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    spunky
    last edited by 29 Aug 2008, 17:19

    I Am glad to be here... I have really just started in rendering... and wonder if you would mind critiquing a recent project. Please critique away!


    critique.jpg

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      Chris Fullmer
      last edited by 29 Aug 2008, 17:29

      Thats really quite nice. I am even going to have ask if it is all sketchup w/a photo background? Or is some of the building a photo? Either way, the rendering is quite great. I would suggest this get moved to the gallery forum I think. Thats a more normal place to post work to critique on and show off. Really though, quite nice. Do you have a higher resolution image? It would be nice to see it in more detail.

      Chris

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        boofredlay
        last edited by 29 Aug 2008, 17:35

        This is really good for what I can see. Please post a larger image if you can so we can see more detail. The only negative I can see thus far is the hydrant... does it have to be there, or in the rendering at all?

        I am going to move this to the Gallery.

        http://www.coroflot.com/boofredlay

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          spunky
          last edited by 29 Aug 2008, 17:49

          Here is a bigger picture... it is sketchup with podium and then a whole bunch of photoshop.


          flatclinic.jpg

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            bubbalove
            last edited by 29 Aug 2008, 17:59

            I agree with Boo about the fire extinguisher... if it has to be there just change it to a different color so it doesn't take your eye away from the building! I like the image as a whole but I think that since your building has shadows your shrubs and trees need them too! Nice stuff... looking forward to more!

            "Success consists of going from failure to failure without loss of enthusiasm." - Churchill

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              mirjman
              last edited by 29 Aug 2008, 18:27

              hey nice work! awesome environment feel... the only thing that strikes me is that there is a lot of black asphalt in the view. Some things you might try are just lightening it up color wise so it isn't such a contrast, tilting the view up so it doesn't take up so much of the frame, or just breaking it up with some landscaping/cars/or people even if that is not the actual design.

              great detailed look to it though, very convincing

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                outersketcher
                last edited by 29 Aug 2008, 18:28

                It looks GREAT to me. You've managed to divest the building of the "Sketchup look" quite nicely. Care to explain a little bit how you performed the render?

                David

                "I mostly enjoy not being dead.." -Grandpa

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                  spunky
                  last edited by 29 Aug 2008, 19:27

                  Thank you! I Am just starting a rendering firm... (is it a firm if it is just one person?) and wondered how far along I was... MOst of this is done in photoshop, the sketchup is the easiest part, the photoshop, that is the hard part... anyone use Podium and really like it?

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                    ridix
                    last edited by 29 Aug 2008, 20:23

                    Nice render. Two comments. Trees on the foreground really need to cast some kind of a shadow; looks pasted. And the curves seem little too high; its almost look like a wall. May be the edges are made too sharp. Is that a Mission Peak on the background?

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                      Chris Fullmer
                      last edited by 29 Aug 2008, 23:09

                      The fire hydrant:
                      Use this to help make a better design. Don't remove the hydrant from the render just so it doesn't detract from the building. If it really detracts, then it should be re-designed to go somehwere else on the grounds. Or perhaps redesigning it to be toned down a little. Bit if it has to stay there and it has to be red, do not remove it from the rendering. That would be lieing.

                      Intermountain health clinic? Isn't that on the wasatch front?

                      Chris

                      Lately you've been tan, suspicious for the winter.
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                        spunky
                        last edited by 29 Aug 2008, 23:50

                        It is actually here in Sunny (and hot as hades) St. George...

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                          Chris Fullmer
                          last edited by 29 Aug 2008, 23:58

                          Ahh, the background mountains weren't as red as I would expect for St. George. My parents live in Ivins. Quite nice out there, but it is a bit warm this time of the year (most times of the year really). Anyhow, really nice work spunky.

                          Chris

                          Lately you've been tan, suspicious for the winter.
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                            galbavy1
                            last edited by 30 Aug 2008, 05:29

                            select the hydrant with the lasso in photoshop and image-adjustment-hue/saturation---desaturate it about 50%, that should help. Saturated colors often don't stand out that much in real life due to material properties like texture and the reflection of the immediate area on it.... I get away with setting the opacity back a bit to avoid putting shadows on photoshopped trees. The transparency "tricks" the mind to not pay as much attention to the plant material- thats the goal if you want to empahasize the architecture, not the landscape... looks really good though!

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                              Chris Fullmer
                              last edited by 30 Aug 2008, 09:05

                              I think its valid to lighten the red hydrant up if it is brighter than it would be in real life. Great tip.

                              But why woud someone want to highlite the architecture and not the landscape?

                              Chris - Landscape Architect (student)

                              Lately you've been tan, suspicious for the winter.
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                                galbavy1
                                last edited by 30 Aug 2008, 18:44

                                @chris fullmer said:

                                I think its valid to lighten the red hydrant up if it is brighter than it would be in real life. Great tip.

                                But why woud someone want to highlite the architecture and not the landscape?

                                Chris - Landscape Architect (student)

                                hey man, LA power all the way! (Im a UF grad and now work at a firm in Tampa) All Im saying is you can strengthen what it is that your trying to present but reducing everything else. When I do renderings for architects I try to make sure that the landscape doesn't detract from the building.... vise versa when I present a landscape plan. Of course in real life they should be designed equally together so they look great together. Have you had a chance to visit Peters' office right above you there? I got to see some of conceptual models for the trade center before they went public!

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                                  Chris Fullmer
                                  last edited by 30 Aug 2008, 18:59

                                  All right, as long as you're not the architect type who doesn't understand why we should even include plants in renderings ๐Ÿ˜„ Theres a lot of them around me where I am I think. I see lots of work that never includes a single photosynthesizing object.

                                  Chris

                                  Lately you've been tan, suspicious for the winter.
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                                    evilelvis
                                    last edited by 1 Sept 2008, 01:27

                                    That looks great!

                                    Nice shadow work mate ๐Ÿ‘

                                    http://www.coroflot.com/MDVee

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                                      brodie
                                      last edited by 1 Sept 2008, 02:20

                                      I don't think anyone's mentioned this so I will. You might relook at how the foreground trees meet the ground. It looks like they run right into the sidewalk area. Might look less pasted to have something at the base. A little mulch, some grass, rocks, something like that.

                                      -Brodie

                                      steelblue http://www.steelbluellc.com

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                                        spunky
                                        last edited by 2 Sept 2008, 15:33

                                        This has been great... I miss being in college and having peer reviews... (I was a photography major). Just after you leave that warm cocoon of creativity... you are just, without perspective on your own work, and you run the risk of thinking all your stuff is just great. So I love this! Thank you all!

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                                          spunky
                                          last edited by 2 Sept 2008, 16:43

                                          And here are the results of all your help!!!!!

                                          THANK YOU!!!


                                          clinicfinal.jpg

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