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    • holmes1977H Offline
      holmes1977
      last edited by holmes1977

      Hi all
      Been a very long time since I have posted anything. Its been a while since I rendered anything.

      This is a 2 unit development, which the client wants to sell off the plans. I spent far to long compared to the money it was paying. But all in the name of learning Vray.

      Would love any advice. All crits welcome
      the Job is due end of tomorrow (Southern Hem)

      Thanks
      jonathan

      http://i607.photobucket.com/albums/tt154/holmes1977_album/Unit2_FR_01_PScopy.jpg

      http://i607.photobucket.com/albums/tt154/holmes1977_album/Unit2_FR_02_PScopy-1.jpg

      Exaggeration makes a dull story better.

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      • dermotcollD Offline
        dermotcoll
        last edited by

        Looks pretty goodto me - only crit is that the second image looks weak on the right hand side and the two buildings seem to merge - seems that the roof on that building isnt a strong enough colour to stand out that little bit - other than that good images.

        When you burn your arse - you gotta sit on the blisters!!

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        • olisheaO Offline
          olishea
          last edited by

          your work is in a different league of quality now πŸ‘

          oli

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          • marked001M Offline
            marked001
            last edited by

            damn...whats there to critique?? these are awesome... first image especially.. awesome.

            http://www.revision21vis.com

            instagram: revi21on

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            • FrederikF Offline
              Frederik
              last edited by

              I agree with Jason, really nice renders... πŸ˜‰

              Cheers
              Kim Frederik

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              • S Offline
                sepo
                last edited by

                Great renders Holmes πŸ‘ πŸ‘

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                • soloS Offline
                  solo
                  last edited by

                  Very nice render, great atmosphere to it.

                  One crit off the back... bottom image has a glass pane missing (top left)

                  http://www.solos-art.com

                  If you see a toilet in your dreams do not use it.

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                  • daleD Offline
                    dale
                    last edited by

                    Great work. Really has an atmosphere.
                    Tiny critique:
                    The perspective and camera angle have the wall skewed from vertical. It doesn't really bother me, but I thought I'd point it out. Or maybe the wall is angled.


                    Picture 7.jpg

                    Just monkeying around....like Monsanto

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                      Fernando Lino
                      last edited by

                      They are pretty nice renderings and design as well...I agree with Dale regarding the vertical distortion is too much for 2 story dwelling...for this particular view in my opinon should be very subtle.....there is a free application where you can play with some film exposures to get them even more realistic looking.

                      Could you post your setting for the glass..do you have a single plane or it has thickness?

                      good job!!

                      Fernando

                      http://www.motivacg.com/recursos/realcamera_mini_en.html

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                        steelers05
                        last edited by

                        i havent read through all of the responses and I apologize if i am repeating anyone, but i really like this. I think the biggest think that needs attention is the driveway...i think it needs to be "dirty-ed" up a bit. it just looks too perfect and kind of dominates the images (especially the first one). Or maybe crop some of it out of the image. But i really like the rest.

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                        • holmes1977H Offline
                          holmes1977
                          last edited by

                          @solo said:

                          Very nice render, great atmosphere to it.

                          One crit off the back... bottom image has a glass pane missing (top left)

                          Its not very clear,but thats a slidding window. (very practical in a sudden summer down pour)

                          @fernando lino said:

                          They are pretty nice renderings and design as well...I agree with Dale regarding the vertical distortion is too much for 2 story dwelling...for this particular view in my opinon should be very subtle.....there is a free application where you can play with some film exposures to get them even more realistic looking

                          Could you post your setting for the glass..do you have a single plane or it has thickness?

                          good job!!.)

                          The glass is in the ASGVIS download section, its called clear_glass Archetectural. I just use an emissive backdrop/billboard to get better sky reflections.

                          Exaggeration makes a dull story better.

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                          • holmes1977H Offline
                            holmes1977
                            last edited by

                            @dale said:

                            Great work. Really has an atmosphere.
                            Tiny critique:
                            The perspective and camera angle have the wall skewed from vertical. It doesn't really bother me, but I thought I'd point it out. Or maybe the wall is angled.

                            So so true Im changing that right now. Thanks for the advice.

                            @steelers05 said:

                            i havent read through all of the responses and I apologize if i am repeating anyone, but i really like this. I think the biggest think that needs attention is the driveway...i think it needs to be "dirty-ed" up a bit. it just looks too perfect and kind of dominates the images (especially the first one). Or maybe crop some of it out of the image. But i really like the rest.

                            Good point. I'll try and dirty it up. Would you do that in PS or add another dirtmap to the diffuse / blend. If that makes any sense.

                            Thanks to everyone else for leaving your comments. Always appreciated

                            Exaggeration makes a dull story better.

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                            • AnssiA Offline
                              Anssi
                              last edited by

                              I liked the renders, but I was somewhat disturbed by the skies in both images - they seem somewhat harsher than the rest, maybe too blue or something. Or is the light to the clouds coming from a different direction than the buildings - I don't really quite know, but they looked somewhat artificial...

                              Anssi

                              securi adversus homines, securi adversus deos rem difficillimam adsecuti sunt, ut illis ne voto quidem opus esset

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                              • honoluludesktopH Offline
                                honoluludesktop
                                last edited by

                                The cg work is very good. I too would use a 2 point perspective, and eliminate the converging perspective lines, do something about the black window (per solo's reference), and create spatial separation between the building, and the renders background elements (for example in the second render, lighten the background landscape elements on the left, and darken the background building on the right).

                                If the renders are to be used for marketing, you might want to add pictorial sizzle. People (especially children if selling to families), cars, stuff in the driveway, exterior lights on the building, etc.

                                I like the foreground trees:-)

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                                • S Offline
                                  sepo
                                  last edited by

                                  I did this quickly on my netbook πŸ˜‰ (13" screen and 1.2 MHz Atom chip)
                                  I am not sure how good or bad it is, so forgive me for intrusion. I thought that original render needed a bit more contrast and sorting out verticals.

                                  http://i965.photobucket.com/albums/ae136/sepo100/Unit2_FR_01_PScopycopy2.jpg

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                                  • holmes1977H Offline
                                    holmes1977
                                    last edited by

                                    just didnt have much time today to include all your suggestions. Got to much on.

                                    I couldnt touch the second house because SU keeps crashing. I think it may have to do with it being modeled ages ago on SU5
                                    Anyway heres a revamp of the first house. Wish I had more time and money to play with it more.

                                    Cheers Sepo for taking the time to play around with that image.

                                    http://i607.photobucket.com/albums/tt154/holmes1977_album/Unit2_ClonburnRd.jpg

                                    I know perspective is still not right. Found changing between 2pt perspective and playing with the FOV realy difficult. But in the end the client loved it.

                                    Exaggeration makes a dull story better.

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